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HEATed up - One-Shot, InuYasha Fan Fiction | MediaMiner
HEATed up - One-Shot, InuYasha Fan Fiction | MediaMiner
The peaceful quietness of the morning was all around the camp. Everybody was sleeping, some good and some not. Inu Yasha was tossing and turning in his sleep like someone would if he had an nightmare. But this was different. Very different. Slowly waking up, he blink several times before standing up only to come down again because his legs weren't able to support him.
Comments
It's not a bad story. It does seem a bit rushed. The use of past tenses for words can be confusing in the English language. Next time just try to pace yourself and your story. No one who reads will rush you. Nevertheless, keep your enthusiasm and desire for writing. It gets better with time and you are already above others with your ability to write in a language.